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Camaraderie [Chapter 12]

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PostPosted: Mon Feb 19, 2007 12:49 pm 
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Please bear with me. This is the first draft of Chapter 12. I've had a lot going on the past couple of weeks so this one sort of spilled out as I went. I wanted to share it - because it's what I like to do. :) But there will be some editing in the near future.

I am finding that I need to spill it all out... then let my mind think of other things for about 24 hours or so. Then revisit the work before I can make descent edits. I hope you like it though...

Editing note: Ok, I've re-read it and smoothed a few parts over. There may be a bit more to take care of. I'm trying to get better at spotting my grammer and formating mistakes.

I have already started a chapter 13... it will be more for myself so Chapter 14 titled "Payback" will probably be a little delayed...

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Ian was disappointed. Dyrke had been dismissive of his report about the Black Cats having an eye on taking over things around the Bifrost. Oh Dyrke had been happy to get the money Chigger had handed over; he just did not seem concerned about anything else. One odd thing did happen. Dyrke forked over a handful of credits. ‘Profit Sharing’ he called it. Ian had expected to be paid as a full member of the gang and all, but this seemed a little generous. He bit his lip, nodded his thanks, and left the room before he asked any stupid questions.

“Ian! Hey, where headed up to the Bifrost to down a few pints. Wanna tag along?”

Ian looked up and saw Rogers, Cacee, and Boanerges walking towards him. Gripping his pocket now flushed with cash he smiled and nodded his agreement.

“Mind if I come along?” came another voice from behind the group.

Ian turned around and saw the kid he had patched up back when he first came below. He looked pretty healthy now and was jogging to catch up. The group stopped and turned.

“Beat it ‘little rat’. Go sit in your room until you’re called upon to complete your trial.”

“Wait Boanerges. He can tag along,” Cacee said. “But… and I mean BUT, you will be quiet ‘little rat’,” he said addressing the juve.

Ian tried to see how the juve’s ear had healed. There was some scarring, but the area around the ear had healed nicely. Only some minor disfiguration. He was sure the kid could still hear out of it.

“What are you looking at” the juve said turning to Ian.

“Easy, easy… just noticing your ear.”

A look of recognition flashed across the juve’s face, but he said nothing.

“Best mind your manners ‘little rat’. You’re addressing a member of the Steel Spiders, which is more than I can say for you. I don’t care what Cacee here says… you are not welcome.”

The team’s heavy was obviously annoyed to have a juve hanging around.

Ian turned to the juve, “look, you’ll be one of the team soon enough. What’s your name?”

“Renold, my name is Renold,” the juve said. He seemed like he wanted to say something else, but then thought better of it. “Alright… I’ll catch you guys later.” And with that he turned and left.

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The Bifrost was alive again. This was not a typical drinking hole of the underhive. The Bifrost was more a small community in and of itself. Inside the drinking hole it housed two common rooms as well as several meeting rooms – one for each of the governing Houses of Hive City. It was rumored that Chigger even had some contacts with the Ruling Houses from above ‘The Wall’. Above these rooms were several boarding rooms that Chigger used to produce even more income. But that was only the part of it.

Trading routes funneled across the bridge and there was an area out on the span that housed a small bazaar – and that was sandwiched in between the Bifrost and the local Enforcer precinct house. Adjacent to the precinct house, on the other side, were several ornate Guilder habs. The small little bridge was cramped to say the least, and the Bifrost was the meeting place for it all.

Men and women from all five of the Houses that controlled Hive City crowded the common area. Chigger was behind the packed bar with two barmaids. Together they were busy dispensing drinks as fast as they could dip the cups into the vats of Second Best (or Wild Snake if the pockets allowed).

Some of the patrons were yelling at monitors over the bar. All three of the dingy black and white screens captured images of two pit fighters circling one another. A roar erupted from half the group when one of the fighters, armed with a massive hook instead of a hand, landed a savage blow to the head of his opponent – the other half grumbled curses. From the back room music tried to overwhelm the cacophony up front.

As Cacee led the group to their private room off to the side Ian caught site of Amber. The Escher he had become acquainted with just before his trials. Making eye contact with her he paused for a moment.

“Come on kid. We’ve got some celebrating to do,” Cacee said throwing an arm around Ian’s shoulder and nudging him to the side room.

Ian maintained eye contact with the woman and silently mouthed, “I’ll be back for you later”.

The Escher smiled.

Their room was set up nicely. A dart alley along the back wall, several tables and chairs – enough room for thirty or more, even a monitor to catch whatever vids Chigger could tap into from Hive City. Membership definitely has its privileges.

-=-=-=O=-=-=-

The four Van Saar enjoyed themselves for several hours, only being interrupted twice to take care of unruly (and mostly drunk) customers. Chigger had kept the drinks flowing, the plates full of food, and the ‘entertainment’ fresh. Ian had declined the latter, instead waiting for the opportunity to slip out and catch up with the red headed Escher that he could not get out of his mind. Just when he had begun to think that chance would never come Dyrke burst in on the little party.

“I thought I might find you all here… Ian you might be interested in this,” the Van Saar leader said as he sat down. “I’ve just received word that the Nomads that we fought a couple of days back have decided to make life difficult for those down below. Apparently after we pulled back they were not satisfied and have been raising hell in the domes below. Seems they want whatever it is you brought back Ian.” Dyrke turned to look at Ian.

Ian shrugged, “they can have it back for all I care. The slug that sent me to my knees did a work on the firing chamber. Even Boanerges here says he can’t fix that rifle. It’s a shame too, it ‘s a nice looking weapon.”

“Well, you will have the opportunity to return it if you want. I’ve planted some information with the spore farmers down there. Something the Nomads should find… irresistible.” Dyrke paused to let that sink in. “You all get to bed. We leave before the next cycle.” And with that Dyrke left, the four men alone, patting Ian on the shoulder as he went.

“What do you think ‘Cee’”? Roger asked Cacee.

“What are you asking me for? Dyrke’s the boss.”

“Yea but, you’ve got a pretty good head on your shoulders. What do you think?”

“I think you need to mind Dyrke.”

And with that the little party was over. The four Van Saar filed on out to get some sleep. As the group neared the stairs down to their hab layer Ian stopped.

“You guys go on ahead. I forgot to pay for that last round.”

The other three just waved over their shoulders and went on their way.

“Now to have a chat with that lass!”

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PostPosted: Tue Feb 20, 2007 2:18 am 
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great as ever.

again catching another less tangible aspects of gang life nicely.

i couldn't see any glaring errors or phrasing. keep it up.

and i perfer the new gang name :D

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also tres bien :D


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Thank you both.

There was/is a lot more I was going to try and squeeze into this story but then I realzied I am writting the progress from only Ian's point of view... not in 1st person, but... you get the idea. I wanted to keep the stories limited to what happens around Ian.

I envision 'The Bifrost' something similar to the London Bridge (for those from the U.K. my appologies for not really know more about that landmark).

Renold is a Juve that recently joined the gang (he is currently a full fledged member) and may have more action in the next battle-type story. I tapped a friend of mine (who also plays Necro) to give me ideas for his name, and when there are choices I ask him what he would prefer. (i.e. there was a choice between skill tables once and he picked Shooting - gunfighter. He also helps me pick equipment for the guy. It helps me give the players a little more variety on the personalities. 8)

The little interactions with Cacee (guys turning to him to ask him questions) --- I wanted to show an increase in Cacee's Ld. He is not in a position to challange for leadership... yet.

The little thing going on between Ian and Amber..... well, I am not trying to rewrite "Romeo and Juliet" in Necro... but somehow it seems to be moving in that direction.

Thus far these twelve chapters represent only Ian's trials. I have two battle reports and post actions to catch up on. Some of the events will probaably be intermingled for ease of writting, but...

Anyway... before I get to chapter 13 I want to review and edit this one...

Thanks again for the feedback.

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well, actually we sold London Bridge to you some time ago.

The one that's still there is Tower Bridge.


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*sigh* See, my ignorance knows no bounds! :(

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its called the "bifrost" any reference to norse mythology gets my appreciation :D


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Well, the mini's for the Van Saar look some what Nordic (to me) - thus the leader using an Axe instead of a sword and the name of the Drinking Hole they 'control' (territory).

I looked up both the London and Tower bridges. My thoughts were of the old London Bridge where buildings, etc. were built up along it and yet the road for vehilcles, etc. remained.

Although - I don't think the Bifrost is quiet that long. Probably only about 1/4 to 1/3 at best.[/img]

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I always thought they looked spanish- scifi conquistadors. Mine are getting names like Cortez. and the one with a bolter looks like Bill the Butcher in gangs of new york...


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Hmm... I am not sure... but I see what you are saying. Isn't 'Van Saar' a French reference as well? I'm sorry - I am not much of a language historian...

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this came up in another thread a while ago. "Van" is dutch, and "Saar" is an area on the french-german border IIRC

basically, Van Saar are Eurotrash :lol:


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shiver85 wrote:
basically, Van Saar are Eurotrash :lol:


Ok - now it makes perfect sense! :roll: :lol:

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